by Dalia Wright
“Father…”
“Run!” Nikolai snapped. The noise drew the three others, though they had long since detected the scent, probably from when Danny had entered and left the club. Or maybe they had been following for days, tracking old smells.
“Father, I’ll help…”
“Run!” Nikolai howled, swiping at his son. “Abomination of blood you may be, but you are still my son! I will not have you die! Not after everything that has happened. Obey this, if nothing else!”
Wasting no more breath on words, Nikolai’s teeth distended, the claws thickened, and strands of hair began developing on his face. His throat rumbled in a series of growls, and he lunged at the three intruders.
Danny groaned. If his father had fed in the last three weeks, he would be so much stronger. He would cope. But he was too addicted to human flesh – he refused all else. Stubborn, foolish man.
Screams, yelps and growls flooded the tight, narrow space.
Now, as his father fought the werewolves, Danny knew he had a real chance at freedom. He could leave the old man to his fate, and escape without a murmur. Maybe he could slink off to a distant state, and try and join the companies down there under a different name.
Maybe. Just maybe.
But, even after all this time, with the knotted rope of hatred, misery and guilt squeezing his guts, he couldn’t.
He just couldn’t leave the old man. Besides, he would be chased to the ends of the earth, anyway. No werewolves accepted the Lubanovs anymore. Whatever noble dynasty his father claimed of their lineage, had fallen to scraping out scraps from the bottom of a barrel. There was nothing left in the world but to run, hide, and kill.
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[S1]He is previously described as having blue eyes. Which would you prefer?
[S2]I think a word is missing here. For example, her Amish tendencies? Shyness? Accent?
[S3]Earlier, it states she had only been in the English world for a couple months, so consider revising this.
[S4]This is a little unclear. Are you referring to the waitress or Sarah?
[S5]Just to be sure, has she been riding in a car while she’s been in the English world?
[S6]Previously, she was described as having brown hair. Which do you prefer?
[S7]Earlier, Sarah says she promised Hanna she would go to the English world, so that’s a little puzzling if they didn’t even know each other. I added “well” to hopefully clear that up.
[S8]This was also said during their first date, so I suggest taking it out to avoid repetition.
[S9]Should this be “Gott”?
[S10]Who is the speaker?
