The Elements of Mystery Fiction: Writing the Modern Whodunit
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Books by William G. Tapply
Brady Coyne mystery novels:
Death at Charity’s Point
The Dutch Blue Error
Follow the Sharks
The Marine Corpse
Dead Meat
The Vulgar Boatman
A Void in Hearts
Dead Winter
Client Privilege
The Spotted Cats
Tight Lines
The Snake Eater
The Seventh Enemy
Close to the Bone
Cutter’s Run
Muscle Memory
Scar Tissue
Past Tense
A Fine Line
Shadow of Death
Other novels:
Thicker than Water (with Linda Barlow)
First Light (with Philip R. Craig)
Books on the outdoors:
Those Hours Spent Outdoors
Opening Day and Other Neuroses
Home Water Near and Far
Sportsman’s Legacy
A Fly Fishing Life
Bass Bug Fishing
Upland Days
Pocket Water
The Orvis Guide to Fly Fishing for Bass
The
Elements
of
Mystery
Fiction
Writing the Modern Whodunit
William G. Tapply
Poisoned Pen Press
Copyright © 1995 by William G. Tapply
Second Edition 2004
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Library of Congress Catalog Card Number: © 2004
ISBN: 978-1-65195-212-0
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Acknowledgments
I am indebted to all of the people who have directly and indirectly encouraged me and taught me how to write mystery novels: My editors Betsy Rapoport, Susanne Kirk, Jackie Farber, Otto Penzler, and Keith Kahla; all those who have read and critiqued my crude first efforts, especially Rick Boyer and Vicki Stiefel; my agents, Fred Morris and the late Jed Mattes; and, of course, my role models, all those writers past and present whose stories have entertained and informed me since I learned to read.
Sylvia Burack first encouraged me to write this book and then edited it relentlessly. Barbara Peters is responsible for the appearance of this new edition, and Rob Rosenwald and Jennifer Semon shepherded it through the production process.
Books would not appear on bookshelves without artists, copy editors, production people, publicists, sales reps, and booksellers. I am grateful to all those I’ve worked with over the years for their good work.
Writers could not persevere without the support of family and friends. I am lucky indeed to have had so many unwavering supporters in my corner: My parents, H. G. and Muriel Tapply; my children, Mike, Melissa, and Sarah Tapply; my stepsons, Ben and Blake Ricciardi; Kate Mattes, who’s always been there; my colleagues and my writing students at Clark University; and, especially, my wife and my love, Vicki Stiefel, to whom this book is dedicated.
W.G.T
March 2004
Table of Contents
Introduction to the Second Edition ix
Introduction xiii
Part I: Writing a Modern Whodunit
Chapter 1 The Elements of Mystery Fiction 1
Chapter 2 Finding Your Story 9
Chapter 3 The Protagonist: The Sleuth As
Hero or Heroine 21
Chapter 4 The Lineup: Villains, Victims, Suspects, and
Other Characters 33
Chapter 5 Point of View: Giving Your Reader a
Place to Stand 43
Chapter 6 Setting: The Scene of the Crime 59
Chapter 7 Getting It Started: Setting the Narrative Hook 71
Chapter 8 Structuring the Story: Building Tension 79
Chapter 9 Building Conflict to Make Scenes Work 91
Chapter 10 Dialogue: The Lifeblood of Mystery Fiction 99
Chapter 11 Getting It Right: Rewriting and Revising 111
Part II: Other Important Considerations
Chapter 12 Writing the Mystery Series, 119
by Philip R. Craig
Chapter 13 Standalone or Series Mystery? 127
by Bill Eidson
Chapter 14 Seeing Double: Making Collaboration Work, 139
by Hallie Ephron
Chapter 15 Doing Business with Agents, 147
an interview with Fred Morris
Chapter 16 Editing and Publishing Mysteries, 155
an interview with Barbara Peters
Chapter 17 The Bookselling Business, 167
an interview with Otto Penzler
Chapter 18 Catch 23: Publicizing Your Mystery Novel, 173
an interview with Jeremiah Healy
Chapter 19 Persistence, 181
an interview with Vicki Stiefel
Introduction
to the Second Edition
A decade ago when I wrote the first edition of this book I worked on an Apple IIe computer. It had no hard drive. The manuscript was printed out on tractor-feed paper in dot matrix and submitted via the United States Postal Service. I saved the text on five-inch floppy disks. It took four of those disks to hold it all.
Today, five computers and ten years later, I am submitting this second edition electronically and saving it on both my hard drive and a CD. All of the additional material that the other contributors wrote came to me attached to emails.
A lot has changed in the world of mystery fiction in the last decade besides the writing technology. Now we have online bookstores. Chain super-bookstores have sprung up like mushrooms after a spring rainstorm. We have print-on-demand books and E-books. Tradition-drenched old independent New York publishing houses have become imprints under the umbrellas of giant multinational conglomerates. Small specialty publishers have popped up all over the country to fill the void.
New best-selling authors have burst upon the mystery scene in the past ten years. Several old best-selling authors have passed from the scene.
But some things haven’t changed. Good books are still good books, and they’re written by solitary, dogged people who know what they’re doing and who are willing to hunch over their writing machines for hours every day, through sickness and health, fair weather and foul, month after month to do it.
The elements of mystery fiction and the ways of the successful mystery writer remain constant. Classroom teachers, workshop leaders, and writing tutors who have used The Elements of Mystery Fiction with their students have told me not to change a word of it.
They have, however, reported that the first edition fails to address a number of issues that their students repeatedly and predictably raise, issues such as: What are the pros and cons of writing a mystery series versus a standalone thriller? What about collaborating on a novel? Why does everybody insist that an author needs an agent? How do the publishing and bookselling businesses really work? If my novel gets published, how can I help promote it? And the universal question that haunts aspiring mystery writers: Recognizing the odds, do I really have a chance of ever seeing my book in print? Why shouldn’t I give up this quixotic drea
m and take up cabinet making, or gardening, or rock climbing?
To address these valid and important issues, I invited, begged and bribed some of the most prominent and successful people in the mystery business to share their experience and expertise for this new edition.
Philip R. Craig (Chapter 12: “Writing the Mystery Series”) is the creator of the long-running Martha’s Vineyard mystery series featuring ex-cop, surf fisherman, gourmet cook, and all-round good guy J. W. Jackson. Phil’s books have been touted on the television show “Good Morning America.”
Bill Eidson (Chapter 13: “Standalone or Series Mystery?”) has published six “standalone” novels, three of which have been optioned for movies. Bill’s most recent novel, The Repo, is the first in a new mystery series.
Hallie Ephron (Chapter 14: “Seeing Double: Making Collaboration Work”) is half of the G. H. Ephron team that has collaborated on four (and counting) popular and critically acclaimed mystery novels featuring psychiatrist Dr. Peter Zak.
Fred Morris (Chapter 15: “Doing Business with Agents”) is a veteran literary agent with the Jed Mattes Agency in New York City, which specializes in mystery novels. Fred has worked with both first-time novelists and old-timers.
Barbara Peters (Chapter 16: “Editing and Publishing Mysteries”) is the founder, editor-in-chief, and publisher of the Poisoned Pen Press in Scottsdale, Arizona; the proprietor of the Poisoned Pen bookstore; and the editor of several anthologies on mystery writing. Barbara has won a number of awards and is one of the most influential people in the mystery world.
Otto Penzler (Chapter 17: “The Bookselling Business”), owner and proprietor of the Mysterious Bookshop in New York City, has been in the bookselling business for twenty years. He’s a publisher and a writer and the editor of numerous mystery short-story anthologies. Otto has won just about every honor the mystery community bestows.
Jeremiah Healy (Chapter 18: “Catch 23: Publicizing Your Mystery Novel”) is the creator of both the John Francis Cuddy private-investigator series and (under the pseudonym “Terry Devane”) the Mairead O’Clare legal-thriller series. Jerry has written seventeen novels and more than sixty short stories, fourteen of which have won or been nominated for the Shamus Award. He belongs to all of the mystery organizations and has been the keynote speaker at countless conventions.
Vicki Stiefel (Chapter 19: “Persistence”) is an expert on her subject. A successful film critic and magazine editor, Vicki served a twelve-year apprenticeship writing, revising, rewriting, and submitting mystery novels before her persistence finally paid off and Body Parts was accepted for publication.
I respect and admire all of the contributors to this edition. I am happy and honored to know them as friends as well as colleagues. In fact, Vicki, to whom this book was (and still is) dedicated, is my wife. Her persistence is one of her most lovable traits.
William G. Tapply
Hancock, New Hampshire
September 2003
Introduction
When I began writing my first mystery novel, I thought I had a crackerjack idea. I had invented characters who intrigued me, I had thought up dramatic scenes and tense conflicts, and I had in mind some vivid settings. I knew where my story would start, I could foresee the direction it would take, and I knew how it would end. I had done enough nonfiction writing to feel confident that I could string the words together. I had even sold a few articles.
I had never tried writing mystery fiction. I had never tried to analyze its elements. So what? Writing is writing, I figured.
That first mystery of mine had everything required of a novel—characters and settings and scenes, themes and plots and subplots, dialogue and description and narrative. When it was finished, it made a gratifyingly tall stack of pages. I was rather proud of my accomplishment. I wasn’t ready to say I’d written a book, but I had written a book-length manuscript.
It now resides in a cardboard box in the attic, where I lovingly entombed it when I realized that it wasn’t very good.
Strangely, I was encouraged by having written a bad novel.
Maybe it’s not so strange. The writers I know seem constitutionally unable to allow themselves to be discouraged by failure. Certainly if I had been discouraged, I wouldn’t have launched boldly into my second mystery novel. And if I hadn’t done that, it never would have been published.
When I started trying to write mystery fiction, I didn’t know what I was doing. I’d taken no courses, read no how-to books, belonged to no critique groups.
What I did have were the echoes of hundreds of wonderful books in my head, the deceptively straightforward prose of Dashiell Hammett and Raymond Chandler and Ross Macdonald and the confident narration of Travis McGee and Dr. Watson and Archie Goodwin, and many, many others.
Reading good mysteries taught me everything I knew when I began trying to write them. “Read, read, read,” said William Faulkner. “Read everything—trash, classics, good and bad, and see how they do it. Just like a carpenter who works as an apprentice and studies the master. Read! You’ll absorb it. Then write. If it is good, you’ll find out. If it’s not, throw it out the window.”
I wrote and published several mystery novels without consciously examining the process or analyzing its elements. It was a profound handicap. Instinct often told me when something wasn’t right. But ignorance prevented me from figuring it out and fixing it. My editor made me do a lot of revising and rewriting, but even with her guidance, it often felt like trial and error.
Sometimes groups invited me to talk with them about writing. They asked me difficult questions, such as, “Where do you get your ideas?” and “How do you construct your plots?” and “How do you write realistic dialogue?” and “How do you plant clues fairly without being obvious?” They forced me to think about what I was doing.
At first, I stumbled through my answers. But I studied and analyzed the work of other mystery writers and took every opportunity to discuss the craft with them. I read how-to books and magazine articles. And I gradually began to understand the elements of mystery fiction.
This book is my attempt to isolate and analyze those elements, to identify the variables that make the difference between success and failure, and to help you write publishable mystery fiction.
Part I
Writing a Modern
Whodunit
Chapter 1
The Elements of
Mystery Fiction
Mystery fiction was born in 1841 when Graham’s Magazine published Edgar Allan Poe’s short story “The Murders in the Rue Morgue.” Here Poe introduces C. Auguste Dupin, the detective who, through his superior intellect and brilliant powers of observation and deduction, sorts out the clues and identifies the murderer of an old woman and her daughter.
The mystery is a puzzler. Dupin is a genius. When he reveals the culprit, readers gasp in admiration.
Literary murders are as old as the book of Genesis. But no one before Poe, as far as we know, ever wrote a story in which the central plot question was “Who did it?” and the hero was a detective who correctly deduced the answer to that question.
If Poe invented mystery fiction, fifty years later Sir Arthur Conan Doyle made it wildly popular. Sherlock Holmes, like Poe’s Dupin, is a brilliant detective who gathers clues, ponders them privately, and then fingers the villain in a dramatic scene of revelation near the end of the story. His worshipful roommate and chronicler, Dr. Watson, follows along to report on his friend’s activities. Watson is Everyman. He’s you, or I, or any reader of average intelligence. Unlike Holmes or his literary predecessor Dupin, Watson is accessible. He speaks directly to readers, who identify with the kindly doctor. He’s as baffled by Holmes as readers are, as awed by the detective’s deductive powers, as intrigued by his eccentricities.
Conan Doyle, with his down-to-earth narrator, his eccentric genius detective, his sharp portraits of nineteenth-century London, and his mind-bending puzzles, transformed mystery fiction into the stuff of best-sellers
, which it has remained ever since.
In the stories of Poe and Doyle and their imitators, mystery readers were not allowed into the minds of literary detectives. Readers had no choice but to remain puzzled while Dupin and Holmes gathered clues and pondered them in private. The reader’s reward came when the detective dramatically identified the culprit, explained the villain’s method and motive, and enumerated the clues that had led him to his uncanny conclusion.
Agatha Christie converted the mystery into a participatory activity for the reader. Christie introduced the vital and revolutionary element of fair play to mystery fiction, making all the clues that were available to her detective equally available to the reader. Readers who could only watch and marvel at Holmes were invited to look for clues and interpret the behavior of Christie’s characters. Readers could match wits with Hercule Poirot or Miss Marple, and when a Christie detective pointed the finger at a murderer, readers could slap their foreheads and say, “Of course! I should have figured that out for myself.”
With Christie, mystery reading became a game between writer and reader. “Fool me if you can,” begged the reader, “and I’ll be disappointed if you don’t. I want you to make me admire how cleverly you craft your plot and how well you camouflage your clues. But you’d better play fair.”
After Christie, successful mystery yarns did just that. The plots were complex, the puzzles bewildering, the motives obscure, and the murder methods bizarre. The story didn’t have to be realistic, nor did the characters need to resemble actual flesh-and-blood people, as long as the clues were laid out fairly—no matter how cleverly they were disguised. The writers of the 1920s and ’30s—Dorothy L. Sayers, S. S. Van Dine, Ellery Queen, Erle Stanley Gardner, Rex Stout, and many others—gave readers what they wanted. The period was known as “The Classical Age” of mystery fiction.